Peer edit

Hi My name is Yolanda and my animation this term is all about cave drawing. My animation is all about Kearn and Mary going to the beach in Samoa in the darkness. Once upon a time Kearn and Mary were going to a sandy beach in the darkness and when they saw this large thing so they went near it.It made a large noise so when they walked in and they saw a Moa the Moa and 2 girls walked and saw people walking with a knife and so they threw the knife at the moa and the girls said ho no!! What's going on. The girls didn’t know what was happening to the Moa. The next day!!! The girls went back in the darkness and saw some white stars up in the dark sky. The moa was sleeping so when he was sleeping they just tidied up the blood on the ground. So when the girls went back the man was about to throw the knife the girls went and grabbed the knife Mary and Kearn jumped at the same time that was really lucky that the girls got the knife and saved the day.
Thanks for watching my cave art animation hope you enjoyed.

Today me and my Aaliyah edited it writing and we worked together to peer edit we read each others writing and Aaliyah read mine and I read her's. here is the writing we did.Writing Task